INITIALLY: Kate attends private ballet lessons.
CHANGED TO: Kate doesn't attend private ballet lessons. Kate is a cleaner and is transferred to clean at a dance studio. It is here that she is again reminded about how she used to dance as a child, as she peeps at the dancers, through the glass windows, as she is cleaning. However, up until this point, she represses her past and how she used to dance. It becomes clear that she stopped dancing because of her mother's discouragements.
JUSTIFICATION: I felt that this adaptation in the script would be more logical and realistic. If Kate has traumatic memories of her overly critical mother and suffers from anxiety, it would make sense if she has completely stopped dancing. This change would allow my screenplay to be more dynamic; first Kate is just a cleaner looking at dancers through glass windows, then she is able to confront her dark past and try to relieve it in a more positive way. In this manner, I aim to capture a hopeful tone and truly show the progression in Kate.
2. KATE AND CLEANING
INITIALLY: Kate is a cleaner by night at a hotel.
CHANGED TO: Kate is a cleaner and is transferred to various locations. When the film starts she is transferred to clean at a dance studio from 9-6.
JUSTIFICATION: I felt like my initial idea lacked strength, as it wouldn't so much allow Kate to reflect on her past. However, Kate's cleaning job at a dance company is significant, as it reminds her of her previous attachment to dancing. Therefore, this would be more relevant to the story. It also adds to the visual quality of the film, as there are balletic sequences.
INITIALLY: The mum is alive. Kate and her mother eat dinner. Her mother is critical towards Kate, expressing how she should get a 'proper job'. Her mum shows her disinterest when Kate says she has started dancing again and continually dictates Kate through her harsh voice. The voice runs through her head. Kate has a flashback of when her mother didn't turn up to one of her dance performances as a child. She comes out of flashback, with built up anger towards her mum. She smashes a plate against the wall and storms out of her mum's apartment.
CHANGED TO: The mum is not alive. The dinner scene runs the same up to the flashback. After Kate returns from her flashback, she gets increasingly furious, as she realises how her mother never supported her. She clenches her fist, picks up the cutting knife and stabs her mother, blood splatters over the white table cloth and the mother's white dress. However, after a moment, there appears to be no woman sitting at the table and no blood, as we find that the mother is only part of Kate's hallucination.
JUSTIFICATION: My decision to have the mother dead is to imply that the mother has left profound effects on Kate, despite not being alive. Kate is still very much governed by her mother. The point where she stabs the hallucination of her mother, is a significant point, metaphorically suggesting that Kate has killed off the critical voice.
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